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Below is a first-attempt practice essay on a Torts fact pattern from the issue-spotting bank, and the grade it received — score, IRAC breakdown, issue checklist, and inline comments. Nothing is edited except the student's name.

Fact pattern

Torts · Negligence
Basic
8 issues

Sarah, a delivery driver for QuickShip, was texting while driving her company van at 45 mph in a 35 mph zone. She ran a red light and struck pedestrian Marcus, who was jaywalking outside the crosswalk. Marcus, who has a rare bone condition, suffered fractures that would have been minor bruises in a healthy person. His medical bills totaled $80,000.

4/10
50–55 / 100 (CA)

Jordan demonstrates a solid foundational understanding of negligence structure and correctly identifies the core elements, but this essay has two critical gaps — negligence per se and vicarious liability — that would significantly hurt a bar exam score, as both are heavily signaled by the facts. Additionally, the eggshell plaintiff rule was framed as a defense argument rather than a plaintiff-protective doctrine, which is a substantive legal error that must be corrected. Jordan's next steps should be: (1) memorize the negligence per se two-part test and practice spotting statutory violations in fact patterns; (2) always ask 'who is the employer?' when a tortfeasor is acting in a work capacity; and (3) practice writing rule statements with authority citations before applying them to facts, rather than jumping straight to conclusions.

Issue Spotting50%
Rule Statement35%
Analysis30%
Conclusion45%

AI-estimated IRAC component performance

Issue Checklist — 6/8 spotted

  • This is a significant missed issue. Sarah violated at least two traffic statutes — speeding (driving 45 mph in a 35 mph zone) and running a red light — and likely a distracted driving statute (texting while driving). Negligence per se is a doctrine that substitutes statutory violation for the common-law breach element when the plaintiff is in the class of persons the statute was designed to protect and the harm suffered is of the type the statute was designed to prevent. This is highly testable and the facts scream for it.

    Rule: Under the negligence per se doctrine (Restatement (Second) of Torts § 286; majority rule), a defendant's unexcused violation of a statute establishes breach as a matter of law if: (1) the plaintiff is within the class of persons the statute was designed to protect, and (2) the harm suffered is within the class of risks the statute was designed to prevent. Some jurisdictions treat statutory violation as only evidence of negligence (minority/some states).

    In one line: Sarah violated traffic statutes prohibiting speeding, running red lights, and texting while driving; because Marcus is a pedestrian within the class of persons these statutes protect and his injuries are the type of harm they were designed to prevent, Sarah is negligent per se — breach is established as a matter of law.

    Full treatment: The issue is whether Sarah's statutory violations establish breach through negligence per se. Under the majority rule (Restatement (Second) of Torts § 286), a defendant's unexcused violation of a statute constitutes negligence per se when the plaintiff belongs to the class of persons the statute was designed to protect and the harm is of the type the statute was designed to prevent. Here, Sarah violated at least three statutes: the speed limit (45 in a 35 zone), the traffic signal law (running a red light), and likely a distracted driving/texting statute. All three statutes are designed to protect road users — including pedestrians like Marcus — from exactly the type of collision that occurred. Therefore, Sarah's breach is established as a matter of law under negligence per se, without needing to apply the reasonable person standard. Even under the minority view treating statutory violation as mere evidence of negligence, the three simultaneous violations would be highly probative of breach.

    Read Negligence Per Se in the glossary
  • This is a significant missed issue. The fact pattern explicitly states Sarah is a delivery driver for QuickShip and was driving a company van. These facts are a classic setup for respondeat superior vicarious liability, which would make QuickShip jointly and severally liable for Marcus's damages. This is highly testable and the facts are unambiguous — Jordan must address it.

    Rule: Under the doctrine of respondeat superior (Restatement (Third) of Agency § 7.07), an employer is vicariously liable for the tortious acts of an employee committed within the scope of employment. An employee acts within the scope of employment when the conduct is of the kind the employee was hired to perform, occurs substantially within the authorized time and space limits, and is motivated at least in part by a purpose to serve the employer. Frolic vs. detour: a minor deviation (detour) does not take the employee outside scope; a major deviation (frolic) does.

    In one line: As Sarah's employer, QuickShip is vicariously liable under respondeat superior because Sarah was driving the company van in the course of her delivery duties — squarely within the scope of her employment — when the accident occurred.

    Full treatment: The issue is whether QuickShip is vicariously liable for Sarah's negligence under respondeat superior. Under this doctrine (Restatement (Third) of Agency § 7.07), an employer is liable for an employee's torts committed within the scope of employment. An act is within scope when it is of the kind the employee was hired to perform, occurs within authorized time and space, and serves the employer's purpose. Here, Sarah was a delivery driver operating QuickShip's company van — she was doing exactly what she was hired to do at the time of the accident. Her negligent manner of driving (texting, speeding, running a red light) does not take her outside the scope of employment; the frolic/detour doctrine only removes liability for substantial personal departures, not negligent performance of job duties. Therefore, QuickShip is jointly and severally liable for Marcus's $80,000 in damages. Marcus should name QuickShip as a defendant, as it likely has deeper pockets and insurance coverage.

    Read Vicarious Liability in the glossary

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Jordan's essay — annotated feedback

The issue is whether Sarah is liable to Marcus for negligence. Negligence requires a duty, a breach of that duty, actual and proximate causation, and damages. As a driver on a public road, Sarah owed a duty of reasonable care to everyone foreseeably on or near the road, including pedestrians like Marcus.
Adequate
This is a solid, clean duty statement that correctly anchors the analysis in foreseeability. Jordan should strengthen it by citing the reasonable person standard (Restatement (Second) of Torts § 283) and explicitly noting that even a jaywalking pedestrian is a foreseeable plaintiff given proximity to the roadway — this preemptively addresses a potential defense argument.
She breached that duty by texting, speeding, and running a red light, none of which a reasonable driver would do.
Needs Work
Jordan correctly identifies all three breaches — strong issue spotting here. However, the analysis is conclusory. Each breach deserves its own analytical sentence. For texting, apply the Hand Formula: B (burden of not texting) is trivial; P (probability of harm) and L (magnitude) are high — breach is clear. For speeding and running a red light, these are statutory violations that should trigger a negligence per se analysis, which Jordan missed entirely. Simply saying 'none of which a reasonable driver would do' is not sufficient legal analysis for a bar exam.
But for Sarah running the light, Marcus would not have been struck, so actual cause is met.
Adequate
The but-for test is correctly identified and applied. However, Jordan only analyzes one of the three breaches (running the red light). Jordan should apply but-for causation to all three negligent acts — texting and speeding also independently satisfy but-for causation. Additionally, consider mentioning the substantial factor test (Restatement (Second) § 431) as an alternative framework used in some jurisdictions when multiple causes converge.
Hitting a pedestrian is a foreseeable result of running a red light, so proximate cause is also satisfied. Marcus suffered real injuries and $80,000 in medical bills, although Sarah could argue she should not be responsible for the full amount because a healthy person would only have been bruised.
Needs Work
This framing is legally backwards and is the most significant analytical error in the essay. The eggshell plaintiff rule (Restatement (Second) of Torts § 461; Vosburg v. Putney) is a plaintiff-protective doctrine — it is NOT a valid defense argument. Jordan should state: 'Under the eggshell plaintiff rule, Sarah takes Marcus as she finds him and is liable for the full $80,000 in medical bills, even though a healthy person would have suffered only minor bruising.' Framing this as Sarah's argument implies she might succeed, which would mislead a reader and cost points on the bar exam.
Marcus was also jaywalking, so under comparative negligence his recovery would be reduced by his share of the fault.
Adequate
Comparative negligence is correctly identified and connected to the jaywalking facts. To strengthen this, Jordan should: (1) distinguish pure comparative negligence (e.g., California — plaintiff recovers regardless of fault percentage) from modified comparative negligence (majority — plaintiff barred at 50% or 51%); (2) analyze the likely fault allocation given Sarah's three simultaneous violations versus Marcus's jaywalking; and (3) note that jaywalking may itself be negligence per se if a statute prohibits it. Also clarify that Marcus's bone condition is NOT a comparative fault issue — it belongs in the eggshell plaintiff analysis.
Sarah is liable to Marcus for negligence, with damages reduced for his comparative fault.
Needs Work
The conclusion is clear and follows from the analysis, which is good. However, it is incomplete because Jordan missed vicarious liability entirely — QuickShip should also be named as a liable party. A complete conclusion would read: 'Sarah is liable to Marcus for negligence, and QuickShip is vicariously liable under respondeat superior. Marcus's recovery will be reduced by his comparative fault percentage attributable to jaywalking, but he is entitled to the full $80,000 in medical bills under the eggshell plaintiff rule.'

Model IRAC answer — excerpt (1 of 8 issues)

Issue 6: Eggshell Plaintiff Rule

Rule: Under the eggshell plaintiff (or "thin skull") rule, a defendant takes the plaintiff as they find them. A defendant is liable for the full extent of the plaintiff's injuries, even if those injuries are far more severe than what a normal, healthy person would have suffered, provided the type of harm was foreseeable. Restatement (Second) of Torts § 461 provides that a negligent actor is subject to liability for harm that is more serious than expected due to the plaintiff's pre-existing physical condition. The rule requires only that some physical harm was foreseeable, not that the precise extent of harm was foreseeable.

Application: Marcus suffers from a rare bone condition that caused him to sustain serious fractures from an impact that would have caused only minor bruising in a healthy person. His medical bills totaled $80,000 — far exceeding what a typical plaintiff might incur from a similar collision. Under the eggshell plaintiff rule, Sarah cannot escape liability for the full $80,000 simply because Marcus's injuries were more severe than anticipated. It was entirely foreseeable that striking a pedestrian with a motor vehicle would cause some physical injury. The fact that Marcus's condition magnified those injuries is irrelevant to Sarah's liability. Sarah must take Marcus as she found him — a person with a rare bone condition — and is liable for the full extent of his damages.

Conclusion: Under the eggshell plaintiff rule, Sarah is liable for Marcus's full $80,000 in medical bills despite the role of his pre-existing condition in amplifying his injuries.

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